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The man who loved Lennon (Free verse) by Caducus
David loved Lennon expressed it in bass, and his lips were a gauntlet of beautiful words, unsung words that became poems on her lips. David loved Lynda. Expressed it in shillings, buying twelve unneeded plectrums for twelve priceless moments, moments that wrinkled from smiles and old thirty threes. Lynda loved to be loved. Expressed it in walking away. Her heels played bass singing fear but David changed the song and in 1969 beneath a Yoko white veil three sons, and four grandchildren waited on lips that lived beyond Lennon.

Down the ladder: All are welcomed.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.6666665
Weighted score: 4.9602656
Overall Rank: 8575
Posted: January 16, 2007 12:06 PM PST; Last modified: January 16, 2007 12:06 PM PST
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[8] Dovina @ 75.82.85.162 | 16-Jan-07/2:50 PM | Reply
The musical undertones work ok, starting with Lennon (presume John Lennon). But for David to express his love with shillings to buy plectrums (very inexpensive) seems weak. Maybe it’s why she walked away. Bringing back the bass voice in her heels is good. Some facts about this I’m not up to speed on.
[6] Stephen Robins @ 213.146.148.199 | 19-Jan-07/7:45 AM | Reply
I preferred Ringo.
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