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untitled (Free verse) by MacFrantic
There is nothing so sweet as the bitter ode from a woman's tongue. She is the razor blade viper; an unearthly diversion. The meek bask in her unrelenting wrath. Her wares are the grotesque corruptions of long-forgotten gains. What the heart provides, she will nourish, and both will flourish. Yet, in the moment of abandon, that overseer will stumble and drive a knife into the chest. So what is the ruse? It's masked in rouge, and smells of perfumed corpses; a testament to the bygones. Because where the devil sleeps she sits upright, staring into the blackness of everlasting night.

Up the ladder: DUKE BLOBBY;;;;;
Down the ladder: puppy love

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.3333335
Weighted score: 5.1589375
Overall Rank: 5156
Posted: December 10, 2006 1:01 PM PST; Last modified: December 10, 2006 1:01 PM PST
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[9] Dovina @ 208.127.72.90 | 10-Dec-06/4:58 PM | Reply
Wow, you write a lot of poems! Are you trying to surpass me in poems posted? Lots of luck there, fella. My fear, however, is that you could be younger, and could win fifty years from now.

All right, here’s the bitter ode from a woman’s tongue: You comment too little! Your comments are fewer than comments received, and this is not only bad etiquette, it’s contrary to the ode “It is more blessed to give than to receive.” So, get into the process – dialog, debate, comment. You’ll become a better poet.

As for this poem, it’s pretty good. One of you better posts.
[n/a] MacFrantic @ 129.82.152.124 > Dovina | 10-Dec-06/6:19 PM | Reply
I'm really just using this site to archive. I read many of the poems, but I don't comment much any more, and I don't care too much if people comment on mine. I'm becoming a better poet through experiencing life, rather than spending all my time on the computer. Be well, and I thank you for the comment.
[n/a] MacFrantic @ 129.82.152.124 > Dovina | 10-Dec-06/6:21 PM | Reply
By the way, I have 316 poems on this site...and counting.
[9] Dovina @ 208.127.72.90 > MacFrantic | 10-Dec-06/8:20 PM | Reply
MacFrantic has 188. Care to say who else you are?
[n/a] MacFrantic @ 129.82.152.191 > Dovina | 10-Dec-06/11:30 PM | Reply
Enkidu (65)
D. $ Fontera (63)
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[n/a] MacFrantic @ 129.82.152.191 > MacFrantic | 10-Dec-06/11:30 PM | Reply
So...318
[9] Dovina @ 208.127.72.158 > MacFrantic | 13-Dec-06/9:38 PM | Reply
ok, you're ahead, but I could have done that!
[10] leonxic @ 129.7.121.238 | 14-Dec-06/12:50 PM | Reply
I sense some contempt. Fantastic writing. 10.
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