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untitled (Free verse) by MacFrantic

There is nothing so sweet as the bitter ode from a woman's tongue. She is the razor blade viper; an unearthly diversion. The meek bask in her unrelenting wrath. Her wares are the grotesque corruptions of long-forgotten gains. What the heart provides, she will nourish, and both will flourish. Yet, in the moment of abandon, that overseer will stumble and drive a knife into the chest. So what is the ruse? It's masked in rouge, and smells of perfumed corpses; a testament to the bygones. Because where the devil sleeps she sits upright, staring into the blackness of everlasting night.

Dovina 10-Dec-06/4:58 PM
Wow, you write a lot of poems! Are you trying to surpass me in poems posted? Lots of luck there, fella. My fear, however, is that you could be younger, and could win fifty years from now.

All right, here’s the bitter ode from a woman’s tongue: You comment too little! Your comments are fewer than comments received, and this is not only bad etiquette, it’s contrary to the ode “It is more blessed to give than to receive.” So, get into the process – dialog, debate, comment. You’ll become a better poet.

As for this poem, it’s pretty good. One of you better posts.




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