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Slur (Free verse) by MacFrantic There's something in me
Wild and broken
Some will see
And I will be devastation
Completely fulfilling
All words concerning
The deliberate
The unintentional
And the fated
There's something with me
Wherever I run
Everything around me grows
Inky fans blow
And wide streaks
Of disappointment
Disfigure my mantle
Here I can show
Nothingness
and everything
As one
Up the ladder:
Today is very far away from a good day
Down the ladder:
the one
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Posted: October 18, 2006 10:57 AM PDT; Last modified: October 18, 2006 10:57 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.8410625 Overall Rank: 10697 Comments:
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Dovina @ 70.38.78.229
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20-Oct-06/3:42 PM
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Nothingness and everything? Have at it.
I like it. It reads well. The one thing I would do: change 'devastation' to 'devastated' or something else entirely.
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