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From Across the Line

Member since 2004 · Posted 4 Sep 2006 · 8 comments

(After Psalm 137) By Flynn’s Creek, I sat and wept, remembering Pasadena and the God of my father. There on a poplar, I hung my guitar, for there my captor asked for a song. My tormentor demanded songs of joy: "Sing me a song of Pasadena and the God of your father." How can I sing the songs of my youth while in a foreign land, to which I fled while my father wept? If I forget you, O my father, may my right hand forget its skill; may my tongue cling to the roof of my mouth. Remember, O Lord, what I did on the day I fell. "Tear it down," I cried, "tear down the foundations of my faith!" O Daughter of Babylon, doomed to destruction, happy is he who repays you, he who seizes your infants and dashes them against the rocks.

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8 comments

[9] Ranger 4-Sep-06/11:40 PM Reply
Glorious
[n/a] Dovina › Ranger 5-Sep-06/4:32 PM Reply
Dismal
[9] Ranger › Dovina 5-Sep-06/11:21 PM Reply
Que?
[n/a] Dovina › Ranger 6-Sep-06/1:55 PM Reply
Gloriously dismal predicament.
[9] amanda_dcosta 5-Sep-06/6:12 AM Reply
Wow D. Looks like you haven't come up with something really really good in a long time until now. Cheers.
[n/a] Dovina › amanda_dcosta 5-Sep-06/4:31 PM Reply
I had to laugh at the way you phrased that. But thanks.
[9] nypoet22 10-Sep-06/9:46 PM Reply
i love this except the last line of the second to last stanza and first line of the last. i was really pining to see the poem close where it opened - if i may be so bold:

"tear down the foundations of my Rose Bowl!"
O Daughter of Disneyland, doomed to destruction,
[n/a] Dovina › nypoet22 11-Sep-06/7:02 AM Reply
Yep, those are good suggestions. Thanks.