A Love Potion (Free verse) by forsaken
I'm not sure how to put this but I'll do the best I can
Cause when you're around me all I want is the priviledge of being your
man
Everytime I see your smiling face
My heart begins to race
I melt with every look into your eyes
When I think of your beauty my soul cries
I know of the pain you feel
It saddens me when you speak of love not being real
Allow me to show you how love can be
Open up your arms and come dance with me
Let your heart leave your body as I take it for a trip
Trust in me cause I couldn't bear to see your heart rip
You're the reason for the joy that's in my day
Even when you're not in my view you're still there someway
Believe me when I say I don't want to see you hurt as I already care
Allow me this chance to heal your wounds so you can know life can be
fair
I'm not saying I want to be your white knight cause I already love the
way you are
I'm just saying I'd like to be the one there for you when everyone else
seems so far
I know sometimes I might not seem all that stable
So you might be thinking that these things I promise aren't able
But don't you know anythings possible with a little devotion
You deserve the best so that's what I'll give as you'll be thinking that
you've been drinking somekind of love potion
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.9333334
Weighted score: 6.931572
Overall Rank: 192
Posted: June 8, 2006 5:03 PM PDT; Last modified: June 8, 2006 5:03 PM PDT
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But there seems to be no consistencey in time and metre and its as if some lines are like chewing gum. They've been pulled and stretched.