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With a pithy stroke (Haiku) by D. $ Fontera Chamberlain comes Death,
On the stair in robes, lamplight.
My pen, still: hand paused.
Up the ladder:
Every Second, Waking Eternity
Down the ladder:
Talia Eternal
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Posted: May 15, 2006 1:54 PM PDT; Last modified: May 15, 2006 1:54 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.72186 Overall Rank: 11898 Comments:
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Edna Sweetlove @ 81.178.117.218
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15-May-06/4:38 PM
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This is bollocks. Your others are better (I hope)
The last line seems to say the same thing twice, which, in a haiku, is far too many.
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