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A predatorâs Joy

Member since 2004 · Posted 1 May 2006 · Edited 2 May 2006 · 8 comments

To ride truth for a purpose To use human feelings for base ends Bawling into the megaphone Strong language Insult, self-aggrandizement, logic Scratching dirt over mistake Crushing reputation and ego Trying to win by any means Then to lie outside the village Where sewage flows Garbage cans stink Abortions are hidden Conceiving tomorrowâs work

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[7] Caducus 2-May-06/9:09 AM Reply

2nd stanza good but drop the word - and - it reads better without it. I think lines 3/4 of S1 are too verbose, how about -

bawling into the megaphone
strong language sieved by mono
insult, logic,
scratching dirt over mistakes....

just have this impression that the passion in ones voice would be wrecked from a megaphone as everyone sounds the same when shouting through a m/phone

[n/a] Dovina › Caducus 2-May-06/3:05 PM Reply

Thanks. I did some of this. See edit.

[8] Ranger 2-May-06/3:23 PM Reply

Sounds like a dig at philosophers. In which case...very accurate, I'm sorry to say.

[n/a] Dovina › Ranger 2-May-06/3:26 PM Reply

Only a particular philosopher.

[8] Ranger › Dovina 2-May-06/3:28 PM Reply

Just one? Damn. You could slap this label on almost any and it would work though.

Now to post my new epic.

[n/a] Dovina › Ranger 2-May-06/3:30 PM Reply

No decent philosopher would lie outside the village where sewage flows and garbage cans stink and abortions are hidden, conceiving tomorrowâs work.

[8] Ranger › Dovina 2-May-06/3:45 PM Reply

I took that bit more metaphorically, as the unadmitted fallacies, weak points and false starts in any theory.

And I'm prepared to bet that if you searched hard enough you could find a story of a philosopher who did that. Probably a Greek one. They did all the cool stuff.

[n/a] Dovina › Ranger 2-May-06/4:04 PM Reply

Yeah, you could take it that way, but I was thinking of smut.

I read your new one. It will take some digesting, and I must go now. Will get back to it.

Thanks for commenting; few do anymore.