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A predator’s Joy (Free verse) by Dovina

To ride truth for a purpose To use human feelings for base ends Bawling into the megaphone Strong language Insult, self-aggrandizement, logic Scratching dirt over mistake Crushing reputation and ego Trying to win by any means Then to lie outside the village Where sewage flows Garbage cans stink Abortions are hidden Conceiving tomorrow’s work

Caducus 2-May-06/9:09 AM
2nd stanza good but drop the word - and - it reads better without it. I think lines 3/4 of S1 are too verbose, how about -

bawling into the megaphone
strong language sieved by mono
insult, logic,
scratching dirt over mistakes....

just have this impression that the passion in ones voice would be wrecked from a megaphone as everyone sounds the same when shouting through a m/phone




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