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the comet (Free verse) by pollywolly whispering
almost glistening
visable to the naked eye
tail ablaze across the sky
the comet
flies
and flies
ever high
high
and higher
this burning sphere
draws never nearer
fear her!
need we fear her?
Up the ladder:
Fireworks
Down the ladder:
BY ALL YOUR HEART
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Posted: March 9, 2006 11:43 AM PST; Last modified: March 9, 2006 11:43 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.9761596 Overall Rank: 8381 Comments:
I liked the first stanza and not the second. The bit of repetition in the first worked for me as did the rhyming of eye and sky. The second verse seems a bit lazy to me compared to the imagery of the first.
Does it really fly? is it a burning sphere? and it draws nearer or farer, I do believe.
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I liked the ending.