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the comet (Free verse) by pollywolly

whispering almost glistening visable to the naked eye tail ablaze across the sky the comet flies and flies ever high high and higher this burning sphere draws never nearer fear her! need we fear her?

BenRice 9-Mar-06/12:52 PM
I liked the first stanza and not the second. The bit of repetition in the first worked for me as did the rhyming of eye and sky. The second verse seems a bit lazy to me compared to the imagery of the first.




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