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forever mourning (Lyric) by outofdarkness138 where did you go...
where can you be...
why did you leave me here alone
promised to live with you through this life
now you leave...
that ain't right
chorus:
the harshest pain..
is the one that snuffs out life with no warning
all the pain... blasts you like a bomb
cry inside
forever mourning
the road i now travel on
all alone, i see no end
tattered in pain and rebellion
whe did they take you
leave us alone
have to fight to get through
all this pain- forever mourning
chorus
i struggle on...
chorus
Up the ladder:
Call upon the wrath of god on ye
Down the ladder:
A New Year Prayer
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Posted: December 2, 2005 8:43 PM PST; Last modified: December 2, 2005 8:43 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0476813 Overall Rank: 6877 Comments:
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zodiac @ 217.144.7.195
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3-Dec-05/6:30 AM
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With a thumping beat I can see it working. But the vocals would have to be almost inaudible.
First two verses are weak. Does this ring a bell?
"Where, oh where are you tonight? Why did you leave me here all alone? I searched the world over and thought I found true love. You met another and Phht! you were gone." The rest of it seems to work ok.
I'll be the first to admit that lyrics can be decieving because they may sound great with music. This just doesn't work too well on the page, though.
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