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i remembered (Free verse) by skaskowski
gasp with greed, your flail, alike. a grasp of reeds, a subtle plight. banked on rubbly slipping sides, you raspy voiced, your cry, aside. your clenching fist, a muddled try. tanked, but flanked by harsh replies.

Up the ladder: Don't be stupid
Down the ladder: Affairs

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.976287
Overall Rank: 8212
Posted: November 18, 2005 12:25 AM PST; Last modified: November 18, 2005 12:25 AM PST
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[9] zodiac @ 212.118.19.155 | 18-Nov-05/10:32 PM | Reply
No comma after "greed"; no period after "plight"; no comma after "cry"; comma rather than period after "try".

Oddly good.
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