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Of the Lady on the Bridge

Member since 2005 · Posted 27 Sep 2005 · Edited 4 Oct 2005 · 7 comments

Every now and then I see the Lady on the bridge. She's got a day; she's got long hair, And a sparkle with a tint. Not many know, she comes and goes, She's got someplace to be. The paths behind and ahead behold What remains here for us to see. Every now and then I see her, Perched upon that bridge. Watching the waters beneath Run off with the wind. Pushed upon and cast along, Another "fool" with a broken wing. Left wondering where it is That she's supposed to be. The choices she's made, Some suppressed and some laid. Have together led her To this shadowy bridge. She stands in a stare While the waters wash her bare, Of all the broken pieces She tries to forget. Where was that turn? A crossroad between now and then. All the blinded signs had passed, Leaving a new trail to begin. A frozen face in time, The little girl she once was. Would have played among these waters, A heart full of love. Still the sun will shine And she still has the day. To pick it all up Or just walk away. Jump into the stream Collect all the pieces. Or trod with the sun And leave all the reasons.

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7 comments

[7] cyan9 27-Sep-05/2:44 AM Reply
Haunting once you become engaged the piece
[8] Dovina 28-Sep-05/5:33 AM Reply
Speculation and joining of speculated ideas is what poetry is and what you've done here. Just leave off the opening remark.
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 29-Sep-05/6:06 AM Reply
Agreed. On a personal note, if the lady on the bridge is a real person, I'll eat a hat.
[8] Dovina › zodiac 30-Sep-05/3:21 PM Reply
I suggest you start with the brim and chomp hard, because I am she. "She's got a day; she's got long hair, And a sparkle with a tint."
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 1-Oct-05/6:40 AM Reply
Really? Are you saying you're REALLY "a lady I always see on the same bridge... She just peers off into the waters... homeless or just listless"? Or should I have made a clearer exception in my hat offer for people who think they're living in undergrad fiction-writing writing?
[8] Dovina › zodiac 2-Oct-05/11:46 AM Reply
Yes, that's what I'm saying. But of course you insist on non-metaphorical "reality." Start chomping!
[7] wilco 30-Sep-05/2:58 PM Reply
I'd leave off the opening statement...and then proofread it..."to this to this shadowy bridge"? I'm guessing a typo...