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Cat Poem (Free verse) by MacFrantic
Looking out my kitchen window Shining sun came through The cloud were moving to and fro Beneath the sky so blue I saw a little kitten there Just playing in the street He circled thus with little care He pranced around so sweet I looked at him, he back at me We caught each other's eye He came across the road to see For sure he was not shy And as he came I felt a joy So deep inside my chest Standing there I was a boy Whose heart had just beat best Peacefully, I went to go And hold the small feline I held him in my fingers so And broke his little spine I hate cats

Up the ladder: Mexican Monday
Down the ladder: Out Of My Mind

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.0
Weighted score: 5.119203
Overall Rank: 5943
Posted: September 6, 2005 10:24 PM PDT; Last modified: September 6, 2005 10:24 PM PDT
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[8] Tintagiles @ 142.166.234.130 | 7-Sep-05/7:18 PM | Reply
Aww. That's lovely. I'd recommend getting rid of the last line, though. It works well with it, but it seems like a touch of gilt to a lily. If you like flowers that way, on the other hand...
[7] wilco @ 66.61.101.130 | 7-Sep-05/9:00 PM | Reply
Hmm, I hate cats too but I don't know if I'd go that far..still a good poem though.
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