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Confused Love (Free verse) by Damien I want to speak to you but I am too scared
Because our conversation may go nowhere
I hate that uncomfortable meaningless talk
That anxious stall and following pause
I dream of subjects that help me know you better
I am only interested in how we can grow together
But can we be together connected by attraction?
A likely reaction to opposite magnets
These games and statements are driving me insane
I just want to settle and develop my mind
You inspire me to love and you relieve my pain
If only I could say this at the perfect time
So you tell me exactly what you need
I am blind at the moment begging to see
Breaking up inside in an endless fight
Using my knowledge and not my sight
Creating a log of my love for you
But why as I have nothing to lose
So I try and try to banish confusion
Speak up for myself and state my illusion
These words to myself calm the urgeâ¦
To spit it all out without rehearse
For if I scare you away
Is it because youâre afraid?
Or just to make me chase first
Up the ladder:
Vietnam
Down the ladder:
Hi
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 2.75
Posted: June 17, 2005 2:59 AM PDT; Last modified: June 17, 2005 2:59 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.7317934 Overall Rank: 11776 Comments:
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Both Dovina and I gave quite realistic feedback. Me personally dislikes the eternally selfabsorbed theme. Others may be suckers for it. But poetry as a means to enema your growing up pangs or disappointments in your marriage life is not everybody's idea of poetry. Poems in where the 'great' Sophocles moons over the beauty of some boy suck just as much. There's only one poet who could afford this, and that's Shakespeare. And she was pulling us on. The word 'shit', b.t.w., is nowhere to be seen here. Did I give you a 1 or a 0? Can't see from here. The poem's not total 'shit', so I'll change the damned vote.
>>Maybe people who can't write poetry will appreciate it?<<
That's a most telling remark. So are Zodiac's links. You simply don't want to read any comments with a negative flavor, Damien. Be a sport and admit it. And yes, there are a lot more than twelve sites around where people will be 'moved' by your writings. They sincerely may be, you know. It's all a matter of setting standards.