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Confused Love (Free verse) by Damien

I want to speak to you but I am too scared Because our conversation may go nowhere I hate that uncomfortable meaningless talk That anxious stall and following pause I dream of subjects that help me know you better I am only interested in how we can grow together But can we be together connected by attraction? A likely reaction to opposite magnets These games and statements are driving me insane I just want to settle and develop my mind You inspire me to love and you relieve my pain If only I could say this at the perfect time So you tell me exactly what you need I am blind at the moment begging to see Breaking up inside in an endless fight Using my knowledge and not my sight Creating a log of my love for you But why as I have nothing to lose So I try and try to banish confusion Speak up for myself and state my illusion These words to myself calm the urge… To spit it all out without rehearse For if I scare you away Is it because you’re afraid? Or just to make me chase first

DoubleU 21-Jun-05/3:38 AM
Wha are to trying to say? "You are all forcing ambitions on me"? Of course!
Both Dovina and I gave quite realistic feedback. Me personally dislikes the eternally selfabsorbed theme. Others may be suckers for it. But poetry as a means to enema your growing up pangs or disappointments in your marriage life is not everybody's idea of poetry. Poems in where the 'great' Sophocles moons over the beauty of some boy suck just as much. There's only one poet who could afford this, and that's Shakespeare. And she was pulling us on. The word 'shit', b.t.w., is nowhere to be seen here. Did I give you a 1 or a 0? Can't see from here. The poem's not total 'shit', so I'll change the damned vote.

>>Maybe people who can't write poetry will appreciate it?<<
That's a most telling remark. So are Zodiac's links. You simply don't want to read any comments with a negative flavor, Damien. Be a sport and admit it. And yes, there are a lot more than twelve sites around where people will be 'moved' by your writings. They sincerely may be, you know. It's all a matter of setting standards.




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