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quick (Free verse) by <~> naked, she laughed
across the bed
in a deepening February afternoon
and i saw that dawn
would bring down cold
like outside knows, frozen inside.
Up the ladder:
Oasis
Down the ladder:
J.F.K.
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Posted: June 14, 2005 1:23 PM PDT; Last modified: June 14, 2005 1:23 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0596013 Overall Rank: 6780 Comments:
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<~> @ 167.206.181.179
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14-Jun-05/1:23 PM
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this poem was written for a word-list challenge. there was a 30 minute time limit.
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zodiac @ 212.118.19.246
> <~>
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15-Jun-05/3:20 AM
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You were given an easy list. When I tried, one of my words was "stereo" and the other "abbreviate".
hey zzinnia long time huh?
I think I get this but 'deepening february afternoon'? If I'm right on my interpretation that line don't sit well. The last 3 lines could verge into a senryu - mixed on this one but I'm gaga for an explanation.
A bit o' depression, eh?
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