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quick

by <~>

Member since 2002 · Posted 14 Jun 2005 · 4 comments

naked, she laughed across the bed in a deepening February afternoon and i saw that dawn would bring down cold like outside knows, frozen inside.

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[n/a] <~> 14-Jun-05/1:23 PM Reply
this poem was written for a word-list challenge. there was a 30 minute time limit.
[n/a] zodiac › <~> 15-Jun-05/3:20 AM Reply
You were given an easy list. When I tried, one of my words was "stereo" and the other "abbreviate".
[n/a] Caducus 15-Jun-05/5:03 AM Reply
hey zzinnia long time huh?

I think I get this but 'deepening february afternoon'? If I'm right on my interpretation that line don't sit well.

The last 3 lines could verge into a senryu - mixed on this one but I'm gaga for an explanation.
[5] Dan garcia-Black 16-Jun-05/8:50 AM Reply
A bit o' depression, eh?