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somewhere between alpha and omega (Free verse) by crin
i always thought i would need you but maybe i'm about to prove myself wrong you always said "no strings attached" so how could you have expected me to hold on i never realized the burden of being half-empty instead of half-full now i know this sickness i'm weak against its gravity and subject to its pull i tried to deny the pain but it came back twice as strong left me choking on broken promises and tied up in knots i don't know if i can exist like this being pulled apart by a universe of stars somewhere between alpha and omega i'm wrapped up in scars yes i think i'd like to come down but i'll take the slow dive so i have time to think clearly cross my fingers close my eyes

Up the ladder: Derailed
Down the ladder: Foreplay

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.4
Weighted score: 5.166884
Overall Rank: 4987
Posted: September 1, 2002 8:51 PM PDT; Last modified: September 1, 2002 8:51 PM PDT
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[9] god'swife @ 209.179.211.134 | 2-Sep-02/9:15 AM | Reply
I don't know who could have given this a zero. It's well balanced and pretty. The 1st & 2nd stanzas are perfectly constructed. This would make a great song. And the last line reminds of how foolish it is to fall in love.
[9] god'swife @ 209.179.211.218 | 2-Sep-02/11:53 AM | Reply
I always love pretty things. There's no grandeur in crin's poem. Maybe you've got some wrong ideas about me.
[6] little_big_nose @ 216.207.133.122 | 2-Jan-04/5:34 PM | Reply
It's pretty good, I don't understand it, which is proubly what you're going for, so good job
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