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somewhere between alpha and omega (Free verse) by crin

i always thought i would need you but maybe i'm about to prove myself wrong you always said "no strings attached" so how could you have expected me to hold on i never realized the burden of being half-empty instead of half-full now i know this sickness i'm weak against its gravity and subject to its pull i tried to deny the pain but it came back twice as strong left me choking on broken promises and tied up in knots i don't know if i can exist like this being pulled apart by a universe of stars somewhere between alpha and omega i'm wrapped up in scars yes i think i'd like to come down but i'll take the slow dive so i have time to think clearly cross my fingers close my eyes

god'swife 2-Sep-02/9:15 AM
I don't know who could have given this a zero. It's well balanced and pretty. The 1st & 2nd stanzas are perfectly constructed. This would make a great song. And the last line reminds of how foolish it is to fall in love.




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