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Ode to Billy Mac (Ode) by windyone Sometimes the nights seem so long
you think of life and things gone wrong
with tender thoughts and love to share
you find your friend someone who cares
and when his journey leads him on
you're glad he came and sang his song
Up the ladder:
missing
Down the ladder:
Openings
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Posted: April 22, 2005 12:21 PM PDT; Last modified: April 22, 2005 12:21 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.1788044 Overall Rank: 4907 Comments:
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windyone @ 63.245.189.43
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22-Apr-05/12:24 PM
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written to a friend who passed like a breath of fresh air through my life at a very difficult period
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zodiac @ 81.10.126.152
> windyone
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22-Apr-05/1:16 PM
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Try not to post explanatory comments on your poems.
There's nothing really wrong with this poem except that it should be properly punctuated and doesn't really have anything distinguishing it. Original or striking poems about friends are hard to write. And there are far too many friend-poems on poemranker. If you're bent on doing it, though, here's an interesting place to start:
http://www.slate.com/id/2092680 Or here: http://www.slate.com/id/3416, http://www.slate.com/id/33215, http://www.slate.com/id/2089046 208 view(s)
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