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Antique

Member since 2003 · Posted 22 Apr 2005 · Edited 22 Apr 2005 · 5 comments

I guess every tear Is worth a wasted breath Maybe that's why I'm such a windbag I've been your hero Victorious in every battle For a kingdom in your name Like your morningstar A weapon of war no longer needed You have cast me aside, for unarmed combat I bare before you my blood Noble but tarnished, drink if you will I can offer no more than every drop

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[9] zodiac 22-Apr-05/1:35 PM Reply
"breathe" should be "breath".
[6] fevriere 24-Apr-05/3:34 PM Reply
What's a morningstar? Is it one of those little choppy throwable disc things with spikes?

I must confess, the first stanza made me want to puke but the fourth I really liked (and the second was ok too - I'm just lost on the morningstar). Weird, eh?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › fevriere 24-Apr-05/5:32 PM Reply
Also called a morgenstern (German for morning star) and a ball and chain mace. The morningstar was virtually identical to the ball and chain mace, the only difference being that a morningstar always had a spiked ball for striking. Like the ball and chain, the morningstar consisted of a metal ball attached by a chain to a wood or metal handle. By extending the weapon’s center of gravity far from the hand, the wielder created a great deal of momentum in a swing. The increased force of impact upon the target was devastatingly effective against armored and unarmored opponents alike.
[6] fevriere › thepinkbunnyofdoom 25-Apr-05/8:36 AM Reply
Right. Is the poet likening himself to a mace?
[n/a] thepinkbunnyofdoom › fevriere 25-Apr-05/10:15 AM Reply
Yes. "A weapon of war no longer needed" coupled with the title. Why a morningstar you might ask? Because it is an extention of reach, and force. Why wouldn't a sword be just as effective? Swords are cliche, and/or he didn't view himself as a piercing weapon. A morningstar is consider a blunt weapon. Hard hitting and only deadly in the right hands.

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