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Couplet (Other) by fevriere This will be wasted time, while she blesses
The name that, soon, the same mouth confesses.
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Posted: April 20, 2005 12:43 PM PDT; Last modified: April 20, 2005 12:43 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0794687 Overall Rank: 6404 Comments:
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zodiac @ 81.10.126.152
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22-Apr-05/1:41 PM
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The commas around soon are unnecessary. Is it really more wasted time than other ways of passing time? That's The Eagles' philosophy, and look where it got them.
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fevriere @ 62.254.128.4
> zodiac
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24-Apr-05/3:22 PM
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Exactly my point. ;D I don't suppose it's ever a waste to bless something, but it's a waste to praise the unpraiseworthy. Does that mean my poem's just a nice pair of lines and not really a poem at all.
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