Poemranker [Poem: Both Sided Acrostic] [by Bhaskaryya] Thu Nov 21 03:05:38 PST 2024

**I know that isn't really good but it's the hardest thing I ever attempted. It has an acrostic message on both ends.** In life, did I ever seeK Loneliness, which haunts me now like A Ordeal from those chilly nightS? Vivacity of early youth thaT Engulfed once me and yoU Yarns my soul today with the fuR Of wistful wishes and futile dreams. I, Until today remember, how on that fateful day I Kicked aside my hesitation and gave you a calL. As soon as you picked up the receiver and said âHellO, Stuttering and stammering I confessed my luV To you. My fate reflected in your voicE. Uttering it in a few unclear words, you winded up my love storY. Reality hit me hard! Though you donât love me, just knowâ¦ wherever I may gO In this earth and beyond, I shall forever love yoU. First side: I love you Kasturi Second side: Kasturi, I love you

[9] Shuushin @ 64.222.131.143 | 5-Jan-05/8:19 AM | Reply

(parallel acrostic) Hey! not bad at all.

couple gotchas in there "A Ordeal" s/b "An Ordeal" so you'll likely have to play with that again.

and "Yarns" is a sticking point.

But still - good and interesting work.

[n/a] Bhaskaryya @ 61.0.144.127 > Shuushin | 5-Jan-05/9:42 AM | Reply

I know it's AN ordeal. But there was no way I could edit it, so I was hoping you guyz would overlook it!! (Damn you!!)

By YARN, I mean to cover. (Yarns my soul...Covers or knits my soul...) That part makes sense though!

Thanks anyway!!

[9] Shuushin @ 64.222.131.143 > Bhaskaryya | 5-Jan-05/10:31 AM | Reply

yes, yarn is plausible and all, just that it still leaves that beat long while the brain has to process it.

And this is not the kind of place you go to have things "overlooked". No, not that kind of place at all.

[n/a] Bhaskaryya @ 61.0.144.109 > Shuushin | 5-Jan-05/7:38 PM | Reply

That was an excellent poem!1 I hope to reach that level someday..I am just a beginner.

Here is a parallel acrostic by my friend...

Treasuring the past I tired to stay in a distant desert, buT
He came and erased the tenebrous days from my memoiR
Only a few momentsâ feelings made us, âusâ from him and I
Marked with uncertainty our love stayed, hushed and virgiN.
Anticipating the recondite dream to bloom as a new epiC,
Smilingly, with open arms, always love waited on our waY

Loving a person with out seeing is not a simple committaL
Optimistically he waited till I revealed that I love him toO
Virtue of prayers must have forced us to divulge our luV
Else, how these feelings didnât get erased in the cruise of lifE
Serendipity is what that kept this relation together, alwayS

Time or space couldnât wreck a love carved deep in hearT
Revolving on the orbits of life, to see an eclipse I did wisH
I could feel emotions growing like a crescent to a full halO
Neglecting all the hurdles of life, love was declared for hiM
Capitulating in his arms, my spirit found complete euphoriA
Yearning to meet this eternal love I wait across seven seaS

Trincy loves thomas and thomas loves Trincy

[0] blacksoul @ 204.215.34.238 > Bhaskaryya | 6-Jan-05/9:23 AM | Reply

That is lovely, you just keep up the good work -9-