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Lies of Society’s Guise

Member since 2004 · Posted 24 Dec 2004 · 8 comments

Gone to a world nothing like here. No more “normal” year after year And no more of the same old cheer. —Gone to a world nothing like here. Here’s a toast to: shedding the first tear, Speaking openly of what we fear And staying true to what we hold dear. —Here’s a toast to shedding the first tear. You’re welcome to come, just give me your hand. I’ll whisk us away to a far off land. Prepare your eyes, for they’ll see something grand —You’re welcome to come, just give me your hand. I’ll teach you the things that you don’t understand, Of seeing the truth and watching it expand And of living in life-sized castles of sand. —I’ll teach you the things that you don’t understand. If you don’t want to stay, well that’s ok. It’s not even a real place anyway. You can stay stuck in that lonely cliché. —If you don’t want to stay, well that’s ok. It may not be made of dirt or clay But it still helps me to face each day By painting over the brown and gray. —It may not be made of dirt or clay. I’ll just stick with my lies tonight. The real world is too full of spite. I can’t make everything alright. —I’ll just stick with my lies tonight.

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[5] Dovina 24-Dec-04/12:15 PM Reply
"Lies of Society’s Guise" is redundant. Why not "Lies of Society."
[n/a] PsydewaysTears › Dovina 24-Dec-04/2:16 PM Reply
I like the sound of it the way I put it. But then again, I'm a sucker for a good silly rhyme any day of the week. :D
[n/a] PsydewaysTears › PsydewaysTears 24-Dec-04/2:18 PM Reply
And besides, it's not actually "society's" lies that the poem is talking about, it about my own lies of how I disguise society in my mind.

•°•Gregory James•°•
[5] Dovina › PsydewaysTears 24-Dec-04/2:52 PM Reply

Society Disguised? Society's Dupe?
[n/a] PsydewaysTears › Dovina 24-Dec-04/7:23 PM Reply
I like Society Disguised. Good suggestion.
[10] Yikes 25-Dec-04/10:51 PM Reply
Well, Lies of Society's Guies has a better rhythmic quality (this is comming from a musician). A lot catchier still in my eyes.

As a whole, if people would take the time to read this piece, I believe they'd be awed.
[n/a] PsydewaysTears › Yikes 25-Dec-04/11:15 PM Reply
Ah yes... but it's that whole ever-present concept of "people" that the speaker of this poem wants so desperately to get away from. Validation from the masses is the last thing this poem needs. :D
[10] Yikes › PsydewaysTears 26-Dec-04/9:36 PM Reply
haha, I suppose you're completely correct!