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Unwanted (Free verse) by Fire_is_cool I sit by your side,
But you treat me,
As if I am not,
Even there,
You make me,
Feel unwanted,
I don't know,
If you mean to,
Or not,
Your friends listen,
To me more,
Than you,
Do you really care?
I have to wonder,
I have to ask,
Because you act like,
You don't even,
Want me there.
Up the ladder:
tower of pain
Down the ladder:
To Whom I Have Not Long Written
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Posted: October 25, 2004 8:43 AM PDT; Last modified: October 25, 2004 8:43 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.552989 Overall Rank: 12664 Comments:
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Dovina @ 24.52.156.155
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25-Oct-04/3:10 PM
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The commas are mostly not right. This is not really a poem, but a statement in prose, a missive.
Badly punctuated crap.
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