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Coin Operated Binoculars (Prose Poem) by T. Jonathron Remp
Steve stood by coin operated binoculars on the bay. A couple waited in line to see the birds. He dropped in his last quarters and swiveled the binoculars towards his house on the hill. He thought he saw him with her on the deck, but the bay, like his heart, was filled with fog. (A 55 Word Short Story)

Down the ladder: FALLING ASLEEP

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.2
Weighted score: 5.2622466
Overall Rank: 3909
Posted: October 14, 2004 12:47 PM PDT; Last modified: October 14, 2004 12:47 PM PDT
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[9] horus8 @ 24.130.62.63 | 17-Oct-04/10:01 AM | Reply
A 55 word heart decunter.
[9] fevriere @ 62.254.128.6 | 17-Oct-04/10:59 AM | Reply
Coul you not make this a poem just by cutting the lines at readable places? I loved it. The "he/him/her" bit's a little confusing but I like that. I really like it all.
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