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Coin Operated Binoculars (Prose Poem) by T. Jonathron Remp

Steve stood by coin operated binoculars on the bay. A couple waited in line to see the birds. He dropped in his last quarters and swiveled the binoculars towards his house on the hill. He thought he saw him with her on the deck, but the bay, like his heart, was filled with fog. (A 55 Word Short Story)

fevriere 17-Oct-04/10:59 AM
Coul you not make this a poem just by cutting the lines at readable places? I loved it. The "he/him/her" bit's a little confusing but I like that. I really like it all.




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