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Enslaved (Free verse) by Twisted Wizard
Once I asked, why am I here? Just a pawn in this never ending game. Like a slave, a puppet I am, Being controlled by this evil being. Every day is always the same, I am subjected to excruciating pain. This darkness has infested my brain, Am I going insane? This disease which eats me away, Bit by bit, piece by piece I slowly fade. Slipping in and out of time, my strings disappear, Am I free? My freedom goes as far as an arm's length, For after being drained, I have no strength. Even though my strings are gone, I am still enslaved by this darkness. Maybe one day I may see the light, Or fall to the wickedness. Beaten and bruised, I fall victim, To the wasted life within. Waiting to die, I have served my purpose, To create another generation, who will be used to finish my unfinished work.

Up the ladder: nation
Down the ladder: Pork

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.9047618
Weighted score: 3.9244611
Overall Rank: 13424
Posted: April 30, 2002 8:41 PM PDT; Last modified: April 30, 2002 8:41 PM PDT
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[n/a] waltfreakinwhitman @ 192.193.210.30 | 15-Aug-02/4:13 PM | Reply
Having one verse that rhymes and the rest in freeverse is extraordinary. And your non-meandering exploration of free-will vs. destiny has never been done before. Keep up the good work!
[n/a] Twisted Wizard @ | 15-Aug-02/10:31 PM | Reply
thanx alot, i know most of my "writing" isnt that great. (i dont know if i can even call it work). I am going to try harder to work on writing skills and stuff like that and maybe try never before done writing techniques.
[1] god'swife @ 209.178.179.94 | 28-Aug-02/11:12 PM | Reply
There's a shot you can get for this, or you can take antibiotics for 10 days. the county clinic will treat you for free.
[7] Ojiboch @ 66.81.158.199 | 5-Sep-02/2:17 AM | Reply
This poem is really great! I can relate to this perfectly! Don't let anyone tell you this poem is horrible!
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