poemranker ::Enslaved by Twisted Wizard

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Free verse № 1131

Enslaved

Member since 2002 · Posted 30 Apr 2002 · 4 comments

Once I asked, why am I here? Just a pawn in this never ending game. Like a slave, a puppet I am, Being controlled by this evil being. Every day is always the same, I am subjected to excruciating pain. This darkness has infested my brain, Am I going insane? This disease which eats me away, Bit by bit, piece by piece I slowly fade. Slipping in and out of time, my strings disappear, Am I free? My freedom goes as far as an arm's length, For after being drained, I have no strength. Even though my strings are gone, I am still enslaved by this darkness. Maybe one day I may see the light, Or fall to the wickedness. Beaten and bruised, I fall victim, To the wasted life within. Waiting to die, I have served my purpose, To create another generation, who will be used to finish my unfinished work.

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4 comments

[n/a] waltfreakinwhitman 15-Aug-02/4:13 PM Reply
Having one verse that rhymes and the rest in freeverse is extraordinary. And your non-meandering exploration of free-will vs. destiny has never been done before. Keep up the good work!
[n/a] Twisted Wizard 15-Aug-02/10:31 PM Reply
thanx alot, i know most of my "writing" isnt that great. (i dont know if i can even call it work). I am going to try harder to work on writing skills and stuff like that and maybe try never before done writing techniques.
[1] god'swife 28-Aug-02/11:12 PM Reply
There's a shot you can get for this, or you can take antibiotics for 10 days. the county clinic will treat you for free.
[7] Ojiboch 5-Sep-02/2:17 AM Reply
This poem is really great! I can relate to this perfectly! Don't let anyone tell you this poem is horrible!