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a night of solitude

Member since 2004 · Posted 4 Sep 2004 · 4 comments

Clouds Brighter as I look west Orange rays of radiance smeared across the heavenly ceiling A loon cries softly in the distance Calling sadly for its lost mate As the breeze causes the leaves above me to stir, I look up Green everywhere I can feel it all around me Life, spirit, peace The totality of the silence beats down on my ears like no noise has ever done Completely alone, and happy I stand and slowly brush the dirt from my pants I unzip my tent, all is black The quite tranquility lulls me into a slight slumber The loon cries once more, but this time quieter The sound fades slowly away All is peaceful Sleep

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[10] sliver 4-Sep-04/8:57 AM Reply
YES!! Very much so. Read my poem The Message(revised).
That is my attempt to discribe camping in these beautiful rocky mountains. Kinda.I got sidetracked.
[n/a] Faulk › sliver 11-Sep-04/3:12 PM Reply
alrighty
[10] sliver › Faulk 17-Sep-04/4:39 PM Reply
Well, you don't have to read it Ass, just tryin' to communicate.
[8] Dovina 4-Sep-04/12:23 PM Reply
Quite nice.
I'd leave out "heavenly" on line 3, and "lost" in line 5.
Line 6: "As the breeze stirs . . .
Omit "The totality of"
A beautiful scene.