Free verse № 111585
a night of solitude
Clouds
Brighter as I look west
Orange rays of radiance smeared across the heavenly ceiling
A loon cries softly in the distance
Calling sadly for its lost mate
As the breeze causes the leaves above me to stir, I look up
Green everywhere
I can feel it all around me
Life, spirit, peace
The totality of the silence beats down on my ears like no noise has ever done
Completely alone, and happy
I stand and slowly brush the dirt from my pants
I unzip my tent, all is black
The quite tranquility lulls me into a slight slumber
The loon cries once more, but this time quieter
The sound fades slowly away
All is peaceful
Sleep
4 comments
That is my attempt to discribe camping in these beautiful rocky mountains. Kinda.I got sidetracked.
I'd leave out "heavenly" on line 3, and "lost" in line 5.
Line 6: "As the breeze stirs . . .
Omit "The totality of"
A beautiful scene.
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