"I don't expect you people to like this,because infact you all are mean!" This is the best line in the poem (minus the typos). Nevertheless, I am going to try to give a "constructive assessment." 1) Creeping silence sounds like something off one of those crazy bands those kids listen today. Plus, silence speaks for itself; it doesn't need to have an adjective necessarily. 2) Do you really understand what the depths of "madness" are? You sound rather young; are you sure it is just not a long bout of teen angst. You know that is what the world needs now. Madness (i.e. depression, bi-polar and the like) is an extremely complex condition both biologically and psychologically and requires much more imagery than throwing a glass to the floor in some sort of angry fit. 3) The choking imagery doesn't seem to have much weight. Can you really choke on life or a pathetic defense and what is the pathetic defense in the poem. Okay, I cannot go on anymore. I tried and you can take this advice if you what to. Or you can just delete the fucking poem.

we're not mean, we're just drawn that way. but seriously, what were you trying to say? that she's depressed? does her self pity overpower her so that she has not the strength to end it? i'm not saying that every protagonist has to be a hero, or even an anti-hero, but i'd like them tto do something other than dress goth and moan about how awful it all is. wooden shoe?

If a poem appears to be "teenage angst," does that automatically make it bad. To many of this site's critics write in a similar style and seem to consider anything different substandard.(Shame). Incidently it would seem a tad hypocritical to comment on typos when including 1 or 2 that paragraph that is doing the criticising.Any here?