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Choking (Free verse) by SoulSlippedAway

Shattered face so lost with fears She stares at broken glass on the floor Suffering madness is what appears Creeping silence covers her mouth She chokes on life and all the hate As she lys in bed unable to move Patiently waiting for a answer for escape That seems will never come As she chokes on hope and all the words Blue lips so bitterly unsaid She washes her hands in confusion Pretending to be undead One more day she prays to her god She chokes on a pathetic defense And her own overpowering self pity Please kill her sobbing weakness -------------------------------------------------- I don't expect you people to like this,because infact you all are mean!

anagram 24-Aug-02/2:40 PM
If a poem appears to be "teenage angst," does that automatically make it bad. To many of this site's critics write in a similar style and seem to consider anything different substandard.(Shame). Incidently it would seem a tad hypocritical to comment on typos when including 1 or 2 that paragraph that is doing the criticising.Any here?




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