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Choking (Free verse) by SoulSlippedAway

Shattered face so lost with fears She stares at broken glass on the floor Suffering madness is what appears Creeping silence covers her mouth She chokes on life and all the hate As she lys in bed unable to move Patiently waiting for a answer for escape That seems will never come As she chokes on hope and all the words Blue lips so bitterly unsaid She washes her hands in confusion Pretending to be undead One more day she prays to her god She chokes on a pathetic defense And her own overpowering self pity Please kill her sobbing weakness -------------------------------------------------- I don't expect you people to like this,because infact you all are mean!

<~> 23-Aug-02/9:51 PM
we're not mean, we're just drawn that way. but seriously, what were you trying to say? that she's depressed? does her self pity overpower her so that she has not the strength to end it? i'm not saying that every protagonist has to be a hero, or even an anti-hero, but i'd like them tto do something other than dress goth and moan about how awful it all is. wooden shoe?




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