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smokestack blues (Lyric) by wilco
The stones can't hold a blurred photograph of nothing but stars and a cold blurry night. They rise into the sky to grasp at blackness and shake away the feel of the billowing clouds. The smokestacks make me think of all the packaged pieces and the devil's dark fingers reaching up to tear away the rain. Expressions on the faces of ladies in the blues are keeping with the timing of the soulful summer sounds. Stacking smoke on top of smoke to sleep inside of chrome, they laugh at all the colors that don't care who they are. Bridge: Out here there's no tomorrow; only an extension of today And when the sun burns out again the circling birds have no idea. The smokestacks make me think of all the packaged pieces and the devil's dark fingers reaching up to tear away the rain.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.7
Weighted score: 6.35
Overall Rank: 828
Posted: May 27, 2004 3:43 PM PDT; Last modified: May 27, 2004 3:43 PM PDT
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[n/a] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.163.155 | 28-May-04/1:06 AM | Reply
Something about this poem bothers me.. I'm not sure why either... which is why I shall refrain from voting.
[9] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.53 | 28-May-04/11:01 AM | Reply
One of those where I'm not exactly sure what is being said, but I listen intently and am thankful for the conversation.

Nicely painted.
[8] ggawrysi @ 67.81.241.50 | 31-May-04/7:23 PM | Reply
i work in the music industry, and as far as a lyric goes this would be extremely difficult to put to music. as a regular free verse poem i'd give this a 9, but as a lyric i have to drop to an 8. very good imagery, by the way
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