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my truth (Free verse) by francis nor capule
i have often thought why people can't kick themselves probably because you learn from the mistakes you make i have often wondered why pride is such an important thing all it leaves you is pain and loneliness nothing in between i have often said to myself that when i find the right one for me there'd be no heartache and tears only happiness true and pure calm, serene and bliss but people make mistakes and sometimes , the harshest of all is never admitting them...

Up the ladder: Princess
Down the ladder: He Is

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.976287
Overall Rank: 8242
Posted: May 25, 2004 5:26 AM PDT; Last modified: May 26, 2004 7:11 AM PDT
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[7] Enkidu @ 204.98.23.2 | 25-May-04/6:53 AM | Reply
Good pace, very even throughout, except for the first two lines which stutter a bit.
S4 L1, 2ps in hapiness.
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[8] Shuushin @ 147.154.235.52 | 25-May-04/11:26 AM | Reply
Is true, is true.

[insert lenghthy diatribe about some tangentally related philisophical difference no-one will remember]

I think the first person works pretty well - second person would probably not work at all... I wonder if third person would add anything?

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