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Ricochets (Double Ethere) (Free verse) by MacFrantic One
Just one
Love beneath
Treating me bad
Hates me forever
Adolescent romance
Chapstick under the collar
Do not leave me before you go
A simple u-turn and back again
Ricochets impairing me without you
Investigate yourself and you will find
Hold me close for I shall not release
Reflections notwithstanding time
Imperfect darkness clouds me
Liberate our passions
Turn our backs to fate
Little wonder
Bated love
Two souls
One
Up the ladder:
The Horror The Horror
Down the ladder:
Pele's heart is now your's
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Posted: May 22, 2004 6:55 PM PDT; Last modified: May 22, 2004 6:55 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.179294 Overall Rank: 4852 Comments:
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Dan garcia-Black @ 64.161.177.233
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23-May-04/5:48 PM
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Nice form. Well executed. Content eludes me. Maybe that's a good thing. I rarely like a poem at first 10 reads. Maybe by line 10-1 I'll get it.
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