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Ricochets (Double Ethere) (Free verse) by MacFrantic

One Just one Love beneath Treating me bad Hates me forever Adolescent romance Chapstick under the collar Do not leave me before you go A simple u-turn and back again Ricochets impairing me without you Investigate yourself and you will find Hold me close for I shall not release Reflections notwithstanding time Imperfect darkness clouds me Liberate our passions Turn our backs to fate Little wonder Bated love Two souls One

Dan garcia-Black 23-May-04/5:48 PM
Nice form. Well executed. Content eludes me. Maybe that's a good thing. I rarely like a poem at first 10 reads. Maybe by line 10-1 I'll get it.




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