Re: a comment on She Searches For Love by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/6:57 PM
well, like i said i was not attempting to make them look like that i have other pieces that reflect something different i will post those so i dont look like a testosterone pumped, womanizaing male...because that is something i am far from being
Re: a comment on She Searches For Love by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/6:54 PM
i understand what you are trying to say in the manner that someone may look at this without the knowledge of the background and see the sexist image of it. but this, i think, is a problem with most people today. they read so much into everything and find something offensive in almost everything. i dont want the characters in these to have names, i think it allows the reader to feel themselves fit in the position much better. and i made the remarks towards kidnappers and rapists because thats what i think of when i think of tinted window vans. no im semi confused, i see you dont want me to stereotype men and women, yet you stereotype a teenage male for driving a certain vehicle. hmmm, understandable for someone thats very protective. i myself am skepical of some of the people that drive the cars they do, in a way it is a self expression. i myself have a customized stereo in my car for the soul purpose that i love music and good sound. but now i understand what yer saying and i hope you can see what im saying. thanks for taking your time to read and respond to all this.
Re: a comment on She Searches For Love by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/6:24 PM
and also...i think you are taking what i am trying to portray in the wrong manner. the story of the girl is based on a friend of mine, suffering from mental disorders that affect her greatly. i support when ever is needed and stay by her side through her suicidal tendencies to help stop her from doing something regretable. now the story of the guy is about me. i feel my life is a waste, i shouldnt be here yet because i feel like no one understands me or what im trying to say. this is a perfect example, i think people take one thing i say and put it into a different context. im sorry you took it the way you did. at no time was i ever trying to portray the male as being stronger and the female. they support each other day in day out. i hope this explaination helps you understand better and never refer to me driving a fucking van, im not a soccer mom. nor am i a rapist or kidnapper, far from both. so please, dont take my words the wrong way, sorry for the confusion
Re: a comment on She Searches For Love by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/6:03 PM
so im a kidnapper now? and yes, they are supposed to be related together. and wow, i guess i suck or something man...i have never been hated that much for this piece...hmm, im sorry...i will take it off then
Re: a comment on She Searches For Love by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/3:35 PM
so you want me to rewrite this, with those restrictions?
Re: a comment on Mental Escape by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/3:33 PM
not harsh, realistic...was high when i wrote this, so it just went on...thanks for all your comments...peace mike
Re: sexy by elizabethann	24-Apr-04/3:02 PM
i really like this one. solid topic and powerful portrayal of your feelings. once again, powerful structure to set the rhythm and speed of the poem...keep it up...peace mike
Re: the salt shaker by elizabethann	24-Apr-04/3:00 PM
powerful and full of emotion. solid structure that gives me a strong sense of breaks and the intended rhythm...peace mike ps: if you didnt know, im the dude who IMed you earlier
Re: a comment on She Searches For Love by validus_vox	24-Apr-04/2:54 PM
yes, i know what you mean...it is a bit wordy...this topic would serve me better in a story, rather than a poem...thanks for the comment...peace mike