Re: We Were Burnouts by jessicazee |
13-Sep-05/10:49 PM |
Pretty good. Needs to be structured a little though. Some grammatical errors. But overall, different and well written.
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Re: Freud Spoke Of A Mother's Tongue, But I Interpret Dreams by Ranger |
30-Apr-06/12:11 AM |
I can safely say I have no idea what this poem is about. That being said though the imagery is amazing. So even if I was completely lost almost instantly, I still enjoyed every line I read. Great job.
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Re: Visiting My Heart by drnick |
9-Sep-06/10:20 PM |
Amazing imagery. Some of the best I've read in a poem. Very well written.
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Re: With Old Light by Ranger |
9-Sep-06/10:27 PM |
I think I'm a sucker for good imagery. Very well done.
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Re: Peter by Wakeboarder20 |
4-Oct-06/11:06 PM |
Well, I revised the poem again. Now it's nothing like it was before. I had reread the story about Jesus walking on the water to a group of fishermen and peter walking out to Jesus. I wanted to do something with that story but couldn't think of what. Right now it's just a straight re-telling of the story. I'm going to try to think of what I can do to change it a little and get some message across.
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