| Re: Tainted by necroscope7 |
3-Apr-05/10:56 AM |
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your overwrought rhymes destroys what you might have had hear
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| Re: Note before work by poetandknowit |
3-Apr-05/10:57 AM |
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| Re: Let Go by PunkyPanda |
14-Apr-05/2:34 PM |
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i understand the emotion and have felt it before, but you need to lighten up on the language, and edit it some before it is really good
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| Re: 16-66 by kingit |
14-Apr-05/2:35 PM |
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| Re: Letter to the Horsehead Nebula by Tangerines |
14-Apr-05/2:39 PM |
nice poem, but you are wrong, this is what it is to be alive and happy
one could also say, that "i woke and could not believe i was still alive / i wished so much that i could die/ im stunned at the pain that the world is filled with / what kind of meaning can one find in this life......and afterward, when is tep out to get the paper/ i am overcome by the futility of it all/ gowing through the motions/ i feel the sharp air stabbing my lungs, look somebody just died/ this is what it is to be alive / everything is a mistake the stars / are mocking me with their happiness/ how can they enjoy being lonely/ at night i stand outside staring/ at the sky, distant planets and suns/stunned by the vast expanse of the universe/ in which i am the source of nothing/ nothing good, nothing evil/ i am nothing and am of no importance/ not even my name will be remembered
just throwing that out there
-megan
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| Re: Fading.+/ by Lindz14 |
19-Aug-05/10:34 AM |
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- wait - ? you favorited your own poem?
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