Re: Untitled by Imago	25-Oct-04/7:34 PM
I agree. It needs finished. It needs the sonnet. But that ain't done yet.
Re: Jesus in a leisure suit by Imago	25-Oct-04/7:42 PM
No actually It's all a true story. Except maybe it wasn't Jesus I saw... mmmnahh It was definately Christ.
Re: Vesper Song by M Hamill	25-Oct-04/8:14 PM
If your Intent was to turn words into music. Bravo. The repetitive "ings" and "ands" and "E's" create a chiming bell effect. A little daunting to read but if in the right mood one can enjoy this. (See E A Poe's The Bells)
Re: Vesper Song by M Hamill	25-Oct-04/8:18 PM
Your first name's not Scott is it? "May the verse be with you."
Re: A Man Who Cares by Dovina	25-Oct-04/8:23 PM
An Ode to plumbers everywhere. Nice little ditty.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Oct-04/8:28 PM
Comforting and disturbing at the same time. Needs a better ending. But Pretty effective.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Oct-04/8:34 PM
Thuckering thuckatash Mr. Peterthon. Exthellent Free verthe. Great work.
regarding some deleted poem...	25-Oct-04/8:46 PM
It sounds nice and steamy but I'm a little sleepy and I just don't want to think so hard. S&M poetry? The word "Fucking" is the most Puritan part of the whole piece.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/12:13 AM
This poem touches so many bases. You could have beat the Red Sox with it. Perfecto Mundo.
Re: Vesper Song by M Hamill	26-Oct-04/12:38 AM
sorry I meant Mark Hamill. I need sleep.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/11:11 AM
Your a very versital poet. You seem to cover a wide spectrum with your body of work. Jack of all trades master of some you got it in spades
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/11:22 AM
Don't like the city much. Do you?
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/11:31 AM
Sure beats "Happy birthday to you, happy birthday to you..."
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/12:19 PM
Ok Here's my 2 cents. Words and letters are pictures. Abstract symbols. Heirogliphs. So they are applicable to the laws of graphic design.(I'm not talking Concrete poetry). What I mean is placement or layout of words can change their power somewhat.For instance the word stop on a sign has more significance then the word stop on a VCR. Indents are a great way to say this next word has extra meaning, it's more important. As far as breathing and pauses go. It's more of a crap shoot. It depends on who is reading it.Here's a verse of a bad poem I wrote that attempts to make the reader run out of breath. I never dreamed that I would see such beauty like Emily her eyes a silver blue sea that envelopes me as I gaze upon thee I am helplessly I am hopelessly drowning drowning in her beauty lost at sea in a silver blue sea See what I mean "crap shoot". Ed through the dice and I think he got a 7.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/12:33 PM
Great work. No need to comment. The work speaks for itself.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/12:46 PM
Starting with Hitchcock and ending with porn? Useually my day is the reverse of that.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/12:53 PM
I thinks Van Gogh's more of an adjective in this poem. Like "How was your day.- Oh It's been van gogh. I've got an Ode to Dali I might just post up for you art fans.
regarding some deleted poem...	26-Oct-04/2:33 PM
It seems your man of thought is calling your man of action a coward. Maybe they'll duke it out. The last poem in the series really brings it home.
Re: A Girl’s Climax by Dovina	26-Oct-04/3:20 PM
6 words: He's just not that into you. sorry I was looking for a place to drop that new catch phrase. I think your poetry's excellent.
Re: Sacrament by Dovina	26-Oct-04/3:27 PM
You just gave me an idea. Broken bread and spilt wine as a metaphor for a woman's deflowering.