on Untitled by Imago
25 Oct 2004, 7:34 PM
I agree. It needs finished. It needs the sonnet. But that ain't done yet.
on Jesus in a leisure suit by Imago
25 Oct 2004, 7:42 PM
No actually It's all a true story. Except maybe it wasn't Jesus I saw... mmmnahh It was definately Christ.
on Vesper Song by M Hamill
25 Oct 2004, 8:14 PM
If your Intent was to turn words into music. Bravo. The repetitive "ings" and "ands" and "E's" create a chiming bell effect. A little daunting to read but if in the right mood one can enjoy this. (See E A Poe's The Bells)
on Vesper Song by M Hamill
25 Oct 2004, 8:18 PM
Your first name's not Scott is it? "May the verse be with you."
on A Man Who Cares by Dovina
25 Oct 2004, 8:23 PM
An Ode to plumbers everywhere. Nice little ditty.
on some deleted poem
25 Oct 2004, 8:28 PM
Comforting and disturbing at the same time. Needs a better ending. But Pretty effective.
on some deleted poem
25 Oct 2004, 8:34 PM
Thuckering thuckatash Mr. Peterthon. Exthellent Free verthe. Great work.
on some deleted poem
25 Oct 2004, 8:46 PM
It sounds nice and steamy
but I'm a little sleepy
and I just don't want to think so hard.
S&M poetry? The word "Fucking" is the most Puritan
part of the whole piece.
but I'm a little sleepy
and I just don't want to think so hard.
S&M poetry? The word "Fucking" is the most Puritan
part of the whole piece.
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2004, 12:13 AM
This poem touches so many bases. You could have beat the Red Sox with it. Perfecto Mundo.
on Vesper Song by M Hamill
26 Oct 2004, 12:38 AM
sorry I meant Mark Hamill. I need sleep.
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2004, 12:19 PM
Ok Here's my 2 cents. Words and letters are pictures.
Abstract symbols. Heirogliphs. So they are applicable to the laws of graphic design.(I'm not talking Concrete poetry). What I mean is placement or layout of words can change their power somewhat.For instance the word stop on a sign has more significance then the word stop on a VCR. Indents are a great way to say this next word has extra meaning, it's more important. As far as breathing and pauses go. It's more of a crap shoot. It depends on who is reading it.Here's a verse of a bad poem I wrote that attempts to make the reader run out of breath.
I never dreamed that I would see
such beauty like Emily
her eyes a silver blue sea
that envelopes me
as I gaze upon thee
I am helplessly
I am hopelessly
drowning
drowning in her beauty
lost at sea
in a silver blue sea
See what I mean "crap shoot".
Ed through the dice and I think he got a 7.
Abstract symbols. Heirogliphs. So they are applicable to the laws of graphic design.(I'm not talking Concrete poetry). What I mean is placement or layout of words can change their power somewhat.For instance the word stop on a sign has more significance then the word stop on a VCR. Indents are a great way to say this next word has extra meaning, it's more important. As far as breathing and pauses go. It's more of a crap shoot. It depends on who is reading it.Here's a verse of a bad poem I wrote that attempts to make the reader run out of breath.
I never dreamed that I would see
such beauty like Emily
her eyes a silver blue sea
that envelopes me
as I gaze upon thee
I am helplessly
I am hopelessly
drowning
drowning in her beauty
lost at sea
in a silver blue sea
See what I mean "crap shoot".
Ed through the dice and I think he got a 7.
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2004, 12:33 PM
Great work. No need to comment. The work speaks for itself.
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2004, 11:11 AM
Your a very versital poet. You seem to cover a wide spectrum with your body of work.
Jack of all trades
master of some
you got it in spades
Jack of all trades
master of some
you got it in spades
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2004, 11:22 AM
Don't like the city much. Do you?
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2004, 11:31 AM
Sure beats "Happy birthday to you, happy birthday to you..."
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2004, 12:46 PM
Starting with Hitchcock and ending with porn? Useually my day is the reverse of that.
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2004, 12:53 PM
I thinks Van Gogh's more of an adjective in this poem.
Like "How was your day.- Oh It's been van gogh.
I've got an Ode to Dali I might just post up for you art fans.
Like "How was your day.- Oh It's been van gogh.
I've got an Ode to Dali I might just post up for you art fans.
on some deleted poem
26 Oct 2004, 2:33 PM
It seems your man of thought is calling your man of action a coward. Maybe they'll duke it out. The last poem in the series really brings it home.
on A Girlâs Climax by Dovina
26 Oct 2004, 3:20 PM
6 words: He's just not that into you.
sorry I was looking for a place to drop that new catch phrase. I think your poetry's excellent.
sorry I was looking for a place to drop that new catch phrase. I think your poetry's excellent.