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| Re: the lips of your mouth by silvertongueddevil |
24-Aug-02/3:17 AM |
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24-Aug-02/3:22 AM |
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26-Aug-02/1:38 AM |
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Nice treatment of a subject much covered-keeping it in the family worth at least an 8/10
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| Re: I Am The Judge by gianni |
26-Aug-02/1:47 AM |
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I don't want to fall out with you as I made you-I am the judge and it brings heavt responsibilities-nice poem though 8/10
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| Re: KAT 2 by nentwined |
29-Aug-02/10:49 AM |
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1-Sep-02/4:16 AM |
This is your weakest to date. I agree with some of what has been said above. Also quite unlike you, you have not checked for grammatical accuracy e.g "...Rio, because wouldn't IT be nice..."
And please "..the woman I loved more than cheeseburgers... " So you loved this woman more than the meat of a dead poor defenceless animal that never did anyone any harm !
The crown is slipping.
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11-Sep-02/9:52 AM |
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You and me girl, we gave it a twirl. Pole is like spaghetti now, nope there it goes again. What can I say lets play
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| Re: Winter by morffrom |
11-Sep-02/10:12 AM |
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Maybe its not quite a butterfly yet, still coming out of the chrysalis !-anyway the poet seems to be indicating that the premature death of any creature is a cause for sorrow, a buddhist credo of which even tarquin should be aware-I agree with him 8/10
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11-Sep-02/10:14 AM |
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Were you drunk when you wrote this dear ?-I remember you getting out of bed and comng back smelling of the drink-I had no idea you did stuff like this !
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| Re: None by poemreader |
11-Sep-02/10:17 AM |
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Seems a little confused and confusing-have another go and see if you can understand it first !
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11-Sep-02/10:24 AM |
Your sorrow hath eaten up my
sufferance. I see you are obsequious in your love,
and I profess requital to a hair's breadth......nay a scare crow
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11-Sep-02/10:26 AM |
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Thy poeme is not overweight but overdone and underweight sirrah-get thee hence
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