on some deleted poem
29 Jul 2004, 9:26 PM
would be 10, but i balk at the physical :-).
you've done better, and without comma splices. some phrases were very good, and i liked the feel of the poem, but've seen/read a LOT of Lord of the Rings in the past few days and was reminded too much of it. And a comic book called 'sandman'. Anyway, I usually like your stuff but this didn't do it for me.
on some deleted poem
29 Jul 2004, 11:33 PM
i wouldn't quit my day job, but that's a nice rhythm.
on Fragile by QuirkyWonder
29 Jul 2004, 11:39 PM
i wouldn't say you are emo droppings, but that does seem more posed than honest. it is poetry, not lit class.
on A Little Further by thepinkbunnyofdoom
28 Mar 2005, 7:58 PM
Nice. Tho i think These words that make the next more broken might work better. Just a thought.