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The break-up (Free verse) by petite_brunette If this is love: it's being hurt and choking on my tears.
If this is love: it's pain as your voice echos in my ears.
If this is love: it's feeling sad and losing all my dreams.
If this is love: it's like my heart is ripping at the seams.
If this is love: it's without hope, not knowing what to do.
If this is love: it's living life, unaware of what is true.
I close my eyes, unprepared to face another day.
My parting words: 'I love you' as I watched him walk away.
Up the ladder:
how my life is dying
Down the ladder:
Navy Pier
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Arithmetic Mean: 6.625
Posted: April 20, 2004 2:57 PM PDT; Last modified: April 20, 2004 2:57 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.43703 Overall Rank: 3011 Comments:
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Shuushin @ 147.154.235.53
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21-Apr-04/7:07 AM
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the core of a memorable pop lyric, I'd say.
Really a poem true to the poet. I do believe that ellipses would have served the purpse better than colons, but all in all a solid testimony. *9*
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