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missing (Free verse) by francis nor capule
the cobblestones of paris on a lonely night would not encompass what i feel the moon feels without moonbeam the clouds lonely and gray the sun just doesn't shine anymore the meals i had just isn't as good everywalk i take is filled with silence my mind seems like a void that's how much i missed my beloved the black's blacker, the grays grayer... songs are silenced my heart throbs but not so and everything just isn't right..........

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.5
Weighted score: 5.1788044
Overall Rank: 4949
Posted: April 5, 2004 5:57 AM PDT; Last modified: April 5, 2004 5:57 AM PDT
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[6] deleted user @ 68.169.177.107 | 5-Apr-04/2:54 PM | Reply
Zodiac, how can I trust your votes anymore? Too much is overwritten here, too many spelling and grammar faults. Some nice thoughts, but "my heart throbs?"
[10] zodiac @ 152.18.18.75 > deleted user | 5-Apr-04/3:38 PM | Reply
I get whimsical sometimes. Not with you, though.
[10] zodiac @ 152.18.18.75 > zodiac | 5-Apr-04/3:40 PM | Reply
I mean, "the cobblestones of Paris on a lonely night"?? What a leaping turd from the oniony roof of Sacre Couer. "The moon feels without moonbeam," too.
[n/a] francis nor capule @ 210.23.227.51 > deleted user | 6-Apr-04/9:07 AM | Reply
doesn't your heart throb???
[6] deleted user @ 68.66.196.168 > francis nor capule | 6-Apr-04/11:31 AM | Reply
Not for this. The sentiment is too gushing with too little meaning. How do the cobbleestones of Paris encompass anything, for example?
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