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missing (Free verse) by francis nor capule

the cobblestones of paris on a lonely night would not encompass what i feel the moon feels without moonbeam the clouds lonely and gray the sun just doesn't shine anymore the meals i had just isn't as good everywalk i take is filled with silence my mind seems like a void that's how much i missed my beloved the black's blacker, the grays grayer... songs are silenced my heart throbs but not so and everything just isn't right..........

hypatia 6-Apr-04/11:31 AM
Not for this. The sentiment is too gushing with too little meaning. How do the cobbleestones of Paris encompass anything, for example?




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