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Christ At The Oscars (Free verse) by Caducus
Pay to sit with crows See them chew on souls Watch the auction of faith Be sold to buy a conscience. I carried a cross to bear On a Gethsemane of popcorn As people gazed and names rolled And Mel Gibson’s name left me cold. On Oscar night will Christ win? I pray to God Mel thanks him, And as Jewish actors applaud and smile I will wipe a tear from my salted phial, The silver screen has rusted, And profits made from prophets slayed From Messiah to mortal entrusted.

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.0
Weighted score: 6.0
Overall Rank: 1275
Posted: March 24, 2004 12:45 PM PST; Last modified: March 24, 2004 12:45 PM PST
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[8] Shuushin @ | 25-Mar-04/7:11 AM | Reply
"On a Gethsemane of popcorn" is a nice line, but doesn't get the visual punch it should, I think, because popcorn needs to be doing something in this place (like being strewn on the ground or something) rather than being the place.

"salted phial" is a nice ryhme with smile, if slightly out of context -

overall, it shows a nice control of language - maybe shows -off- a bit too, but the subject isn't terribly appealing (personally) - it may find a market though since it's topical. Best be quick though.
[8] Sunny @ | 27-Mar-06/11:48 AM | Reply
Great poem!! Powerful theme that will smack any unassuming reader across the face. Tactful wording. Well thought-out. On a personal note: I am a guiltly audience member, glorifying the mere middle-man & not the prince. How ignorant mankind can be. Thank you personally for the slap.
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