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Christ At The Oscars (Free verse) by Caducus

Pay to sit with crows See them chew on souls Watch the auction of faith Be sold to buy a conscience. I carried a cross to bear On a Gethsemane of popcorn As people gazed and names rolled And Mel Gibson’s name left me cold. On Oscar night will Christ win? I pray to God Mel thanks him, And as Jewish actors applaud and smile I will wipe a tear from my salted phial, The silver screen has rusted, And profits made from prophets slayed From Messiah to mortal entrusted.

Shuushin 25-Mar-04/7:11 AM
"On a Gethsemane of popcorn" is a nice line, but doesn't get the visual punch it should, I think, because popcorn needs to be doing something in this place (like being strewn on the ground or something) rather than being the place.

"salted phial" is a nice ryhme with smile, if slightly out of context -

overall, it shows a nice control of language - maybe shows -off- a bit too, but the subject isn't terribly appealing (personally) - it may find a market though since it's topical. Best be quick though.




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