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Fly (Other) by etherealmaiden
She awoke in the darkness Her whole life in a box No memoirs in her head Everything lost Struggling to reach Striving to see Through all of the shadows Hoping to be free No memory of the past No memory of the power Only knowing cruelty Forcing her to cower Knowing only that light shines Outside of her box Will she choose to fly Or let all be lost?

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.3333333
Weighted score: 4.8013287
Overall Rank: 11180
Posted: March 17, 2004 10:48 AM PST; Last modified: March 17, 2004 10:48 AM PST
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[7] richa @ 81.178.234.98 | 17-Mar-04/11:14 AM | Reply
The rhythm of the the first verse I like.

The other verses are too predictable however and the rhyme cower with power is absurdly forced.
[3] fuzzylogicisatwat @ 195.92.198.71 | 18-Mar-04/1:06 PM | Reply
A big stinking pile of pump.
[n/a] etherealmaiden @ 66.71.73.78 > fuzzylogicisatwat | 18-Mar-04/2:50 PM | Reply
do i get a reason or are you just going to be rude?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 > etherealmaiden | 18-Mar-04/3:08 PM | Reply
You'll get mainly rudeness on poemeranker. Rudeness and shit poetry. Rudeness, shit poetry and clog-dancing dunces who waste their time writing sarcastic replies to other people's comments. -10-
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