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A Dutch Peasant (Free verse) by richa
Not all folded roads come up as mountains, not here in the lowlands marshland sinks and we can't see the rock faces bend like a spider to topple down valleys.

Up the ladder: Making a Man
Down the ladder: the sky chooses blue

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Arithmetic Mean: 9.666667
Weighted score: 5.55628
Overall Rank: 2414
Posted: March 4, 2004 6:50 AM PST; Last modified: March 4, 2004 6:52 AM PST
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[10] zodiac @ 152.31.228.13 | 4-Mar-04/1:44 PM | Reply
Great, as ever - though a little obviously a haiku (to me; maybe no one else will notice.) How important is it for you to stick to haiku form? Also, you're missing a semicolon (!) or period after lowlands.
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