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A Dutch Peasant (Free verse) by richa Not all folded roads
come up as mountains, not
here in the lowlands
marshland sinks and
we can't see the rock faces
bend like a spider
to topple down valleys.
Up the ladder:
the sky chooses blue
Down the ladder:
Honeymoon
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Posted: March 4, 2004 6:50 AM PST; Last modified: March 4, 2004 6:52 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.55628 Overall Rank: 2448 Comments:
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zodiac @ 152.31.228.13
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4-Mar-04/1:44 PM
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Great, as ever - though a little obviously a haiku (to me; maybe no one else will notice.) How important is it for you to stick to haiku form? Also, you're missing a semicolon (!) or period after lowlands.
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